Part 2 of 4! This time from Garrus's POV. Also posted on FF.net as the second chapter.
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Garrus doesn't like Saren. In case you missed it.

I know the scene doesn't play out exactly as it does in canon. Let's call it (accidental) artistic liberty, eh? Besides, why would Saren jump off his hoverboard to begin with?

The fight on Virmire always leaves me with a lot of questions. Actually, Virmire in general leaves me with a lot of questions, like 'why did Saren need the beacon on Eden Prime when he already had one at his base?' Or 'where's the other two squad mates and why couldn't they go help the other team instead of making Shepard choose?' As for the fight itself, I always wonder what the squad mates are doing during Shepard and Saren's chat, where Kaidan/Ash is during the fight and why they're not helping. Hello, we're trying to save you here. A little help, please?

But I digress.

The other thing that I find interesting is Saren's actions at the end. At the bombsite, he goes to neck-lift Shepard and at the AA Tower also adds dangling Shepard over the edge. Why do that instead of just shooting? Makes me wonder if Saren wasn't planning to kidnap Shepard. On the technical side of things, I'm not sure about the pacing here. It's a short chapter, so I tried to keep it interesting. Not sure if I succeeded. Fight scenes always give me trouble, so I guess I need more practice. Oh, fight scenes. Why are you so hard? *sigh* Comments, critiques, thoughts and opinions all welcome!